Wikipedia:Peer review/Karakuwa, Miyagi

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[edit] Karakuwa, Miyagi

I'm attempting to get this article up to FA status, with the hope of it being featured in late March next year (just before the town ceases to exist and is merged into Kesennuma). I'd appreciate any suggestions on what to expand, general suggestions on the writing, and any interesting details that people would like to know. Thanks for the help! --William McDuff 04:50, 10 Jun 2005 (UTC)

  • I see only one external link. Where are the references? Also, I'm missing a culture section in the article. You could take a featured city article and see what's included in that and get an idea on what still needs expanding. Mgm|(talk) 09:13, Jun 10, 2005 (UTC)
    • I've moved over the merger information link (and the town hall website is linked on the table, by the way, perhaps I should duplicate it?) An other reference was the Japanese page...and I'm living in the city at the moment. Still, yes, this gives me a direction to expand to. Have to go digging (paper and people, most probably). Thanks for the input! --William McDuff 21:58, 10 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • It seems too short to me, even for a small city like this one. There's probably plenty of other things that could be added, such as local government, culture, business, sports, &c. I'd compare it to some featured cities, as Mgm says. Also you'll probably have to convert your bulleted lists into narrative form. Thanks. — RJH 17:26, 10 Jun 2005 (UTC)
    • I can work on most of those. (Though sports... There's never been a high school in the town, so that's tricky. Perhaps the Junior High has done something, but is that notable?) Culture, though. I need to find out about the festivals, specifically. Thanks for the input! --William McDuff 21:58, 10 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • Perhaps you would like to go through some towns which are Featured Articles. Kalimpong, 50,000 residents is a great place to start from.  =Nichalp (Talk)= 14:01, Jun 11, 2005 (UTC)
    • You're right, Kalimpong is a great starting point. I had paged through the places looking for a comparitable small town, but there was nothing terribly close, I thought. Must have thought Kalimpong was a park or mountain or something, I guess. Thanks! Major edits coming... --William McDuff 21:52, 11 Jun 2005 (UTC)
    • Suggest a map of Japan or at least Kyoto (?) showing the location. As a cultural reference, may I commend:
  • Japan - The Story of a Nation by Edwin O Reischauer. LoCCC# 77-10895 Afred A. Knopf, Inc., New York. Previously published as Japan Past and Present (4 Eds., 1946-64)

Edwin barely pays attention to politics, and sums up wars in one or two paragraphs, but he's pretty good on the culture which appears to be his passion, and he specifially discusses your MULBERRY TREE rescuers as a causcoid people to whom he attributes the fact that many Japanese of their descent have significant facial hair. I'm pursuing the Russo-Japanese and Sino-Japanese wars, so I've just given the first five or six chapters a good skim reading, but you might well be able to mine far more than I. Fabartus 06:30, 13 Jun 2005 (UTC)

    • Excellent! I will find the book and read it as soon as I can get it. Thanks for the tip! --William McDuff 12:50, 13 Jun 2005 (UTC)
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