Talk:Jun Shibata

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This whole paragraph is awful: "Actually, she is not famous yet inside and outside Japan, but her beautiful singing voice, her words and melodies, and her cute looks have attracted many fans within her home country.And she doesn't use English words and song titles almost."

The middle part's not bad, about why she has fans, but the first part (she is not famous yet inside and outside Japan)(Is there somewhere she is famous?) and the second sentence (And...almost) is horrible. Here's a first pass at cleaning this mess up. Moofoo, Apr 5, 06