Talk:Ice pier

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Congrats, this article is well into B-territory.

1. It is suitably referenced, and all major points are appropriately cited.
2. It reasonably covers the topic, and does not contain major omissions or inaccuracies.
3. It has a defined structure, including a lead section and one or more sections of content.
4. It is free from major grammatical errors. (Close, needs a little tweaking)
5. It contains appropriate supporting materials, such as an infobox, images, or diagrams.

I really enjoyed the article, but I do have some suggestions:

  • Check out WP:LEAD. I'm thinking something like "The McMurdo Station Ice Pier is a..."
  • The section titles seem a little off to me.
  • I'm personally not a big fan of putting the lead image on the left, but that's pretty subjective.
  • I haven't really checked, but it feels like some more WikiLinking should be going on. I.e.: Snowcat, Lyttelton, New Zealand
  • Minor language problems here and there, like: "scarf (shave)" -> "to scarf, or shave," I'll do a
  • The method for citation is up to the editor. However, I've been looking at recent FA's and GA's and notice their citations usually use {{cite web}}, {{cite book}}, etc...
  • I opened up Diego Garcia just to compare the two. A few things popped out: a) the lat/long dealie, b) the first image on d.g. orients the reader as to where in the world we're talking about.
  • Should "References" be "External links?"
  • Are there any related documents at Commons or the other sister projects?

That might sound like a lot of negatives, but I think you could make a run at Good Article with this if you want. I'll do a copyedit pass soon. Cheers. HausTalk 22:39, 3 April 2007 (UTC)

Excellent feedback, Haus. Your suggestions were easy fixes, such as crafting a better leadin. I am a Wikipedia outrider, though, when it comes to subheads (headlines). I often use the journalistic style of including a verb in the subhead. This apporach gives the reader a better idea of what lies ahead. For instance, see McMurdo Sound.
Meanwhile, what a shame that engineers haven't figure out how to properly dispose of McMurdo's ice piers. Some 21,000 thousand feet of steel cable and 650 feet of 2 inch pipe used in their construction sink to the ocean floor each time an ice pier is dumped. Moreover, Winters Quarters Bay at McMurdo is one of the most polluted harbors anywhere. Tons of materials, equipment; including vehicles, were dumped in the bay over a period of decades.--Fishdecoy 17:33, 4 April 2007 (UTC)
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