Talk:History of Dallas, Texas (1874-1929)

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History of Dallas, Texas (1874-1929) was a good article candidate, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. Once the objections listed below are addressed, the article can be renominated. You may also seek a review of the decision if you feel there was a mistake. Date of review: 2007-03-19

[edit] GA failed

I have assessed this article according to the GA criteria. Although the article appears to be broad and has plenty of images (good job on getting all of the free images!), it needs better work on the prose to be well-written. Here are a few suggestions that should be fixed, plus some statements that should have inline citations added.

1. See if you can expand the Modernization section more; I'm sure there are more details about the zoo and perhaps you can better lead into the section by having a short summary of the other periods (such as the city's previous history) before the current section of history.
2. "The industrial growth in Dallas formed partially out of problems hurting Dallas area farmers:" Change the colon to a period and then reword the next two sentences.
3. Add more wikilinks throughout the article; assume people of all ages/different countries will be reading this article, and may not be familiar with some of the terms.
4. According to Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), the headings are only supposed to have the first main word capitalized.
5. "It was the world's leading inland cotton market, and it still led the world in manufacture of saddlery and cotton gin machinery [3]." Change to "...in the manufacturing of". Also, the inline citation goes directly after the punctuation, not before it. In the sentence before this one, it mentions buffalo and a link to African buffalo, make sure it is supposed to be African and not American.
6. "The relationship between Dallas and the Trinity River had never been what any of the city's forefathers had intended. The dream of navigation all the way to Galveston was a dream of many that was never realized." Reword these two sentences, or add some inline citations.
7. "On May 26, 1908, The Trinity River reached a depth of 52.6 feet (16.03 m) and a width of 1.5 miles (2.4 km)." "The" is not supposed to be capitalized.
8. "This had already been tried following the 1890 flood—the result was the "Long Wooden Bridge" that connected Jefferson Boulevard in Oak Cliff and Cadiz in Dallas, but the resulting unstable bridge was easily washed away by the 1908 flood." Use a different word instead of resulting, as result was already used once before in the sentence.
9. Southern Methodist University section needs further expansion.
10. Wikilink full dates such as 5 October 1912.
11. Add some outside external links that may provide more information about the subject. At least two or three should be sufficient to help provide the reader with other outside information. Make sure to follow the guidelines of Wikipedia:External links.

Add inline citations for:

1. In 1893, following the national financial panic, numerous industries and five Dallas banks failed.
2. Cotton prices dipped below five cents a pound, and the lumber and flour markets had all but vanished.
3. By the turn of the century Dallas was the leading drug, book, jewelry, and wholesale liquor market in the Southwestern United States.
4. Five people died, 4,000 were left homeless, and property damages were estimated at $2.5 million.
5. Ultimately a US$650,000 bond election was approved and in 1912, the Oak Cliff viaduct (now the Houston Street viaduct) was opened among festivities drawing 58,000 spectators.

After fixing the above suggestions, please renominate again (or just let me know and I'll review it again so you don't have to wait another month for it to be reviewed). The article appears to cover the period well enough, but it needs more information in some sections and some minor formatting. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page, or if you want another review, see Wikipedia:Good article review. Good work so far, and consider getting a peer review to determine any other issues that I may have overlooked. --Nehrams2020 22:38, 19 March 2007 (UTC)