Talk:Harry Lorayne

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I am not quite sure if it is NPOV to have a paragraph about his copyright controversies three times longer than biography itself; it may be true, but it's really too long. It would be great if others could confirm these claims. And also, imho, there are many other publications in magic that don't cite sources properly (maybe not just as famous). So I put the section into NPOV dispute, for lack of better mark that something is wrong there. Samohyl Jan 20:53, 13 September 2005 (UTC) Great. :) Now it reads like an advert. Sources are needed! Samohyl Jan 03:24, 24 October 2005 (UTC)

I have a soft spot for this one - its soooo OUT THERE as promotional! so i am toning it down..  ;o) Tiksustoo 11:11, 26 October 2005 (UTC)

[edit] Passive Voice

There is too much passive voice in this article. An interested editor might address the following issues:

1. Someone needs to rewrite the fragment "who has apparently been called" to something like "In the (fill in specific date) issue of Time Magazine, (fill in Author) called him.... As written, a casual reader cannot easily verify the sentence.
2. "Although probably more famous for his mnemonic shows..." needs a source.
3. The sentence that begins with "He is held in high regard by some" needs to specify who holds him in this regard and when and where they stated their regard.
4. Volumes I and II are considered in some quarters to be classic tomes of close-up magic. Who considers them? When?
5. Lorayne is a self-styled "street kid" who grew up on the Lower East Side. this is a very pov sentence that should be deleted.
6. Create a references section with a list of his major books and their ISBN numbers

TheRingess 00:57, 2 January 2006 (UTC)