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[edit] League of Nations

A bit of a self-nomination. This article is the outgoing Wikipedia:Collaboration of the Week and has improved tremendously. AndyL 08:07, 3 Jan 2005 (UTC)

  • I have also made a bit of a contribution to the article, and I reckon it fulfills all the requirements. Smoddy | Talk 18:09, 3 Jan 2005 (UTC)
  • 'Abstain. Progress. Keep up the good work. Object. I am impressed with how the article improved, and I am fairly certain I will support it in a few days, but there are few things that still need improvement: 1) section 'Criticisms of the League' needs to transform from bullet points into normal paragraphs 2) more references then one would be useful 3) This section should be merged (or put after) with 'Failures' section , preferably around 'Demise of the League' (which could use a little expantion), to keep the logical flow of the article. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus 22:51, 3 Jan 2005 (UTC)
    • Have added a couple more references. Those and the websites listed below are all I used in the page - obviously I cannot speak for others. User:Smoddy | Talk 20:30, 5 Jan 2005 (UTC)
  • Object. Multiple one and two sentence paragraphs show areas that could stand to be expanded into full ideas or simply need to be merged into other paragraphs. It breaks up the flow of the text too much. - Taxman 15:52, Jan 8, 2005 (UTC)
    • What more is needed? If you can be a little more specific, I'll try to address these issues you have. Thanks. Smoddy | Talk 16:16, 8 Jan 2005 (UTC)
      • Every one or two sentence paragraph could stand to be fixed. It's not necessarily that they need more information, but either expand them or merge them in with the nearby paragraph so they are not haning out on their own. Some people disagree with the need for elimination of one sentence paragraphs in writing, but I have never seen a wikipedia article that is not better by the near elimination of one sentence paragraphs. - Taxman 19:03, Jan 8, 2005 (UTC)
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