Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/John III of Portugal/archive1

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[edit] John III of Portugal

This candidate article is a fine work that needs just some adjustements because it was translated from Portuguese. The objective is to improve. --Joao Campos 17:19, 11 July 2005 (UTC)

  • Object.
    1. Image:Lisbon 16thcentury.jpg, Image:Portuguese flag 1495.gif, Image:Portuguese elm.jpg, Image:Macau oldmap.jpg have no copyright information.
    2. There are no references besides the 1911 Britannica.
  • --Carnildo 18:22, 11 July 2005 (UTC)
  • Refer to peer review. I'm sure the article has potential, but it has too many language problems to be ready for FAC. It needs a good copyedit, preferably by someone reasonably proficient in Portuguese, as there are a number of sentences that are hard to understand, e. g. The preparation for his sister's (Isabella, princess of Portugal) marriage with Charles V, made possible for John III to bold his alliance with the Emperor—what..? "Bold"? The paragraphs are too short throughout and need merging. Linking needs to address the readers' information needs (compare the linking of Emperor in the quoted sentence), there are formatting problems such as non-standard use of italics, and, well, as the nominator seems to be aware, the article needs a bit of a fixup altogether. Peer review is the place for that. Bishonen | talk 18:54, 11 July 2005 (UTC)
  • Object. It has potential but it should have gone to PR first, as Bishinen wrote. Still, while it is here, this is a list of things to fix: 1) add references, 2) format lead to 3 paras and ensure it is a good summary 3) this is serious: this is supposed to be a biography, yet the entire 'The_Empire' section looks like it should be moved to History of Portugal! It is history with John's quotations. Move quote to Wikiquote, copy relevant part to History... article, incorporate rest into the article in section like 'John's policies' or sth similar 4) ilinks are missing - better red then none. From first few paras, I'd like to read on: Maria of Aragon, Portuguese theatre, Tomás de Torres, D. Diogo Ortiz de Villegas, Luís Teixeira, António de Castilho, Isabella, princess of Portugal, Catherine of Austria... --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 19:44, 11 July 2005 (UTC)
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