Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/History of Pittsburgh/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 06:17, 31 January 2007.

[edit] History of Pittsburgh

This article traces the colorful and dynamic history of Pittsburgh. This is a self-nomination. I nominated it first in Oct 2006. Since then, the following improvements have been made:

• lead section improved
• copy-edited by myself and other Wikipedia:WikiProject Pittsburgh editors
• maps improved and made more compliant with Wikipedia:WikiProject Maps standards
• adherence to Wikipedia policies improved following peer review
• information in lists and short paragraphs moved to more substantive paragraphs
• reference density increased, and other improvements based on previous FAC feedback

I believe this article is now ready to be featured. I look forward to making further improvements based on your feedback. Automated peer reviews have already been conducted and should no longer be necessary. Tomcool 18:54, 20 January 2007 (UTC)

Object. Not comprehensive. For example, the University of Pittsburgh, the city's largest employer, is not mentioned at all.RyanGerbil10(Упражнение В!) 20:19, 20 January 2007 (UTC)

Object Not encyclopaedic enough. Not enough mention of U. Pittsburgh given its import in state politics and society. 62.30.217.20 03:10, 21 January 2007 (UTC)

The article did in fact include several statements about the city's universities, including this one about Pitt: "Oakland's University of Pittsburgh erected the world's second-tallest educational building, the 42-story Cathedral of Learning." There was also a See Also link to the University of Pittsburgh article, and a link to Historic Pittsburgh, part of University of Pittsburgh's University Library System. I've added additional information about Pitt's founding and its significance as a top employer in the city. Obviously there's a lot of history to tell about each of the city's significant institutions, such as US Steel, CMU, Mellon Bank, Alcoa, PPG, etc., but we can only do so much in one article. The treatment is to touch the tops of the waves of the institutions, telling the story of the city overall, and leaving more detailed histories for the individual articles on those institutions. Tomcool 18:41, 21 January 2007 (UTC)

Well, so far two editors (one that's an anonymous IP making its second edit) think it needs more Pitt. It had some Pitt and I added some more. Any other thoughts, please? Tomcool 21:39, 22 January 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.