Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Gordon B. Hinckley/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 00:11, 11 February 2007.

[edit] Gordon B. Hinckley

I have nominated this article for FA is it is well written, very long, with Citations, full detail, very advanced, with quality images in it. Also being very intresting on the president of the church of Latter day Saints. It is also a spoken article for Wikipedia. I don't know why this article hasn't been nominated yet. Retiono Virginian 14:52, 4 February 2007 (UTC)

• Comment ref fmt is massively inconsistent.Rlevse 16:31, 4 February 2007 (UTC)

• Object per Rlevse's concerns and the fact that certain statements still need citation per 1c. LuciferMorgan 09:47, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

Which ones?jj 18:06, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose for above, for numerous issues with the prose (stubby list-like paragraphs for the main part of "Life", large overuse of "also" and "additionally", wikilinked single years, etc.) and comprehensiveness (only two real sections: "Life" (should that be "Biography"?) and "Awards"). Trebor 15:10, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
• Object Needs a thorough copy edit. Examples only:

• Born in Salt Lake City, Utah, Hinckley completed high school there in 1928. - A bit clunky. Maybe try something like - Hinckley was born in Salt Lake City, Utah, where he graduated from high school in 1928.
• He served in the British mission headquartered in London in 1933. He started in... Consecutive sentences beginning with "He" - reduces flow.
• but for most of his mission worked in the mission office - "Mission" is used twice in one sentence.
• Hinckley returned to the United States in 1935 after having completed - "after" is redundant.
• preaching the gospel in both Berlin and Paris. - ditto "both"
• Out of this meeting - From this meeting. + Ceoil 20:52, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose excessive use of fair use media, one unfree image to show what he looks like would be OK, the rest are not justified.--Peta 00:08, 9 February 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.