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[edit] All That

I grew up with this show, and the article features a brilliant prose, and amazing insight as far as the show's cancellation. It is either well on the way to become a featured article, or already is one. FireSpike 16:41, 20 February 2006 (UTC)

• Object. References need to be broken out seperately from the External links as per WP:CITE (the two sections serve different functions). In addition the embedded HTML links need to be expanded out into full citations. Further review pending the article's references have been brought up to sn acceptable level. --Allen3 ^talk 17:07, 20 February 2006 (UTC)
• Support. Per Nomination.—The preceding unsigned comment was added by FireSpike (talk • contribs) 18:38, February 20, 2006(UTC).
• Object, for the following reasons:
  • in-text citations need to be converted to footnotes. A lot of statements also need sourcing, example: "Nick then paid Dan Schneider (the only original producer who agreed to stay with the show) a large sum of money to overhaul and relaunch All That." Also make sure to use a reliable source (imdb user comments aren't a reliable source)
  • wikilinks to non-existent articles (red links) should be de-wikilinked.
  • More background needs to be given. For example the sentence, "Kevin Kopelow and Dan Schneider ran All That together in the first four seasons." first needs to tell the reader who Kevin Kopelow and Dan Schneider are the first time they are referenced (not in the second paragraph).
  • I'd suggest using paraentheses with restraint, I found far too many run-on sentences. Example: "After the replacement of My Brother and Me (which only lasted for 13 episodes and was replaced by Roundhouse) on their 8:30 p.m. Saturday night time slot, Nickelodeon decided they needed their third sketch-comedy series (to succeed You Can't Do That On Television and the afordmentioned Roundhouse) to come on their schedule (hence, All That was born)." would be better structured as, "After the program My Brother and Me was cancelled after 13 episodes and replaced by Roundhouse at the 8:30 p.m. Saturday time slot, Nickelodeon decided that they needed a third sketch-comedy series to succeed You Can't Do That On Television and Roundhouse. As a result, All That was born.
  • Avoid contractions unless quoting someone directly (it is instead of it's, etc)
  • There is too much informal writing and weasel words (see WP:AWW), the best example being this paragraph:

The news of All That's cancellation was mostly met with indifference. Viewers who were never fans of the Seasons 7-10 version of All That pretty much welcomed the cancellation. So-called "golden age only" fans feel that All That really ended after Season 6. Whereas, they feel that the latter episodes were essentially a half-baked, poorly constructed attempt at continuing the franchise. Basically, some believe that after ten seasons, All That has pretty much run its course (and it's now time for Nickelodeon to develop brand new sketch comedy series).--Fallout boy 04:47, 21 February 2006 (UTC)