Talk:Endemism in the Hawaiian Islands

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[edit] Innappropriate tone

This article sounds too conversational. It lacks the formal tone of an encyclopedia.

"Distance—remoteness—is a filter. And of those germs of life that occasionally made it through, how many found their way into a suitable microclimate? Whether a seed or spore attached to a lost migrating bird's feather or an insect falling out of the high winds, put there by a storm in its homeland—of these, how many found a place to survive and whatever else was needed to reproduce?"

This quote demonstrates how conversational the article is. I'm not an expert, but putting forward questions, then answering them sounds too casual. Its not just this isolated quote; there are other places. Therefore, I have posted a box on the top of this page. SeanMD80^{talk | contribs} 20:45, 21 July 2006 (UTC)