Talk:Encantadia plot summary (part one)
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[edit] One Crucial Winkantadian Comment
The writing and literary style is that of a child. This editor could not even spell prove correctly. I know no one is perfect but truth is that measures must be done to fix this article. First of all, the pronouns and nouns used are misused. One of the many confusing grammatical problems is to whom is referred to. Even the simple Mila, Mira and Lira aspect is very confusing. I could suggest that for these articles, their current names should be used. (Mira and Lira only) This would prompt the reader to remember the details. It should just be introduced that in the start of the show, their names were different due to Pirena's revenge. Second, there are no clear transitions and missing details. Personally, I have no editing capability of this particular article because I was only fascinated by Encantadia when it was at its second book. I just got other details about Enca from my mother. Anyway, the details must be properly informed. One thing that I noticed is that there was no mention of how Pirena and Agane became queens. It may be already written on the article Lireo but where does it fit the timeline?
One must always assume that when writing articles, the reader does not know anything about it albeit there is a possibility that he/she does. (This is by the way, the proper way of using pronouns and nouns). Due to the lack of grammar exemplarity, the plot becomes confusing thus proving its low worth as an article. Merc, could you please edit this as you started the Winkantadian project anyway and you have the best vocabulary and grammar skills here. I am not here to offend but give constuctive criticism. Please fix this!!! deecee 16:39, 6 May 2006 (UTC)
