Talk:Cheyenne, Wyoming

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Should any mention of Wyoming once being part of the Republic of Texas (and maybe mexico before that?) be made?

Would the elevation be worth mentioning? It's 100 miles north of "mile-high" Denver. -- Sylvar 15:32, 9 May 2006 (UTC)

Contents 1 Poor Article Quality 2 Which is bigger? 3 Indians "hunting" white men 4 Improvements

[edit] Poor Article Quality

This article looks more like an advertisement than an educational resource. It has four sentences that end with an exclamatory mark, and I've never seen such a thing in any published encyclopedia. Furthermore, this article frequently uses bolded words, which I've never seen on a WP article before. It looks ridiculously out of place, as if it was copied and pasted from somewhere else. I may go through the article myself and change this, but I don't want to do anything that would make the regular WP people angry. Sentences with exclamatory marks (And further criticisms from myself) are as follows:

"They couldn't get home and back in that period of time. So, they just poured into Cheyenne for the winter, swelling its population to over 10,000, virtually over night!"

Using "So" at the beginning of a sentence must be against some English rule of some sort. I'm no English expert, but this just doesn't sound right to me. Just an example of the atrocity that is this article.

"Of that, 200 were children, 400 were women (mostly Ladies of the Night) and the rest...well, they were just plain rowdy!"

That probably violates every Encyclopedia-quality sentence standard known to mankind. Ladies of the Night? Give me a break. This is an encyclopedia, not an infomercial.

"Cheyenne was at the time THE richest city in the world per capita!"

I have a fairly hard time believing that, but, seeing as this article does not cite most of its sources, it should be easy to see why. Also, the all-caps "THE" just looks annoying. It has no place in an encyclopedia that is trying to maintain its factual accuracy above that of the Encyclopaeaeaedia Britannica.

"Participating in this annual event are nearly 700,000 rodeo fans!"

This, talking about Frontier Days, isn't true any more. At one point, there might have been 70 thousand fans present. Last year, there were hardly 70 thousand people (Residents and tourists) in town, let alone "Rodeo fans". Surely somebody makes a census of this stuff.

The first portion of this article simply isn't up to the high standard of quality that I am used to when perusing the Wiki. Furthermore, I'd be willing to edit it myself if I weren't so noobtastic when it came to Wiki formating and courtesy. Oh, and just so that I don't sound too cynical, the article from Geography onward (Minus Other Information, paragraphs 2, 3, and 7, and the phrase "somewhere in the briney deep" in paragraph 9) is just fine in my opinion. Just my two or three cents. -- An anonymous coward, former Cheyenne resident

[edit] Which is bigger?

The Wikipedia site for Casper claims that that is the biggest city in Wyoming.

• That statement was true in the 1980s, but economic changes in the oil industry were a significant factor in Casper's diminishing population from the late 80s and into the 90s. The recent natural gas boom has helped to reverse the trend. Casper may become the larger city in the near future. Zenithian 17:02, 23 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Indians "hunting" white men

Is this article lifted from a cowboy novel? If Indians "hunted" white men, and "killed many" I think we need some citations. --mgaved 10:02, 12 March 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Improvements

I've taken the liberty of revising the section on winds--the facts were accurate enough but the phrasing was clumsy and amateurish. In the realm of the decidedly unencyclopedic, however, may I ask--what on earth is the purpose of that little squib about a low demand for nurses at the local hospital? Is someone trying to discourage job applicants? Hoping to drive out the competition? —The preceding unsigned comment was added by 66.27.73.102 (talk) 05:13, 19 March 2007 (UTC).