Talk:Bradley Joseph/Archive 1

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[edit] Note from author/editor

I am not affiliated with Bradley Joseph, but am an interested-enough party to try and write a valid concise, informative, and verifiable article about his work and career, and have cited all references. If anyone has more knowledge and would like to elaborate, or finds a discrepancy, please feel free to edit this article, or enter your comments/thoughts here and I can edit it. Please adhere to Wikipedia guidelines for biographies of living persons, i.e. Biographies of living people should be written responsibly, conservatively, and in a neutral, encyclopedic tone, with due regard to the subject's privacy, and as much as possible to cite sources that are credible, neutral, and independent. Thank you. Cricket02 06:06, 8 September 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Assessment

This article has come a long way and has really improved in the last few months. Cricket02 asked me to come and look over the article. Here are some notes:

  • There is no need for a lot of external links. I removed a few of the links, because they did not provide any valuable information.
  • The infobox has a lot of genres in it. Would it be possible to generalize his genre in order to keep it manageable? If more genres want to be discussed in the article that is fine, but we do not want to get too specific if it can be helped.
  • The introduction could use a little more information and length (2-3 paragraphs). See WP:LEAD.
  • I was a little surprised by the tables' colors. Is there any reason not to use "class=wikitable"? Also, the professional reviews would be best linked to from an album's article page.
  • Although the article looks fine with the gaps between paragraphs, it would be best to remove the breaks inbetween them.

This article has the ability to become a good article, – Heaven's Wrath   Talk  21:45, 14 December 2006 (UTC)

Re: discography section. I think it would be best to use "class=wikitable". I added his studio albums into a gallery and then the credits I edited to a wikitable. (We can continue the discussion here, I have this page watched.) – Heaven's Wrath   Talk  21:17, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
It looks great! I like the gallery and I didn't know the wikitable could be downsized like that, it looks so much better. That was just the tech help I needed. Thanks so much! Do you think the intro is expanded enough now? Cricket02 03:48, 16 December 2006 (UTC)
I added a little more information to the intro. It is not worded very well, so feel free to edit/revert it. And I think the length is looking good. – Heaven's Wrath   Talk  01:53, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
I really appreciate your time and expertise here, thanks much. Cricket02 18:30, 17 December 2006 (UTC)

[edit] GA on hold

Article is looking good, few things stop it from getting GA status

  • Bradley Joseph (born in 1965) sounds cheesy, take this example from Paul Mcartney, (born June 18, 1942, Liverpool) sounds better
  • Remove the double space before the biography section
  • On the info box make it www.bradleyjoseph.com a lot clearer to read.
  • He started playing classical piano at age 8, put eight, numbers below 10 should be spelt.
  • A lot of wikilinks are repeated throughout the article making it very blue and awkward to read.
  • Joe Senser, and Wheelock Whitney, does Joe need to be mentioned? that red link stands out a lot
  • Sheet music has one link to an album? no point of it being there as the album is in the discography
  • Fan sites are a no-no on wikipedia
  • Remove the space between the template and the external links. tried - didn't work.  ?
  • References arent formatted properly, please check {{cite web}}
  • This paragraph 'His music can be heard in regular rotation in the United States and Canada' has two links that are not formatted as references
  • Remove the random quote at the end of solo career
  • —Bradley Joseph, Indie Journal Interview, external link in the middle of the text, make it a reference or remove. Removed both as they are in Wikiquote
  • Perhaps add a song sample or two so readers know what his music is like. I would like to and 've looked into this before, but technical limitations prevent me from doing so.
  • People from Willmar, Minnesota | People from Saint Paul, Minnesota he's from both?

I will put it on hold as these issues aren't huge and you seem active on this article. Feel free to ask any questions as i am only here to help :) good luck! M3tal H3ad 05:46, 21 December 2006 (UTC)

Thank you for your time. Issues addressed with a few comments above. Cricket02 16:23, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
Issues addressed, article is looking a lot better good job. Passed GA M3tal H3ad 01:19, 22 December 2006 (UTC)
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