Talk:A-bike
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[edit] Article tone
This seems very much like an ad to me... anyone else feel that way? --feba 15:47, 18 January 2007 (UTC)
- Reading it, yes. I've tagged it for cleanup, but if you want to start by having a go, please do so! Cheers --Pak21 16:03, 18 January 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Reads a bit like an advertisement
First, I'd like to say that the A-bike looks to me like a cleverly-designed little machine and that after many edits getting rid of POV marketing language, I think this article is not terribly far off from coming across as objective.
However, statements like
The clear differences between the A-bike and other folding bicycles are the "telescopic structure" and the "twin-chain system". The telescopic structure enables the bicycle to diminish until it becomes about 25% in volume.
give me the impression I'm reading directly from company-provided promotional material. I've since modified it to say
The A-bike uses a telescoping structure to reduce the apparent volume in its collapsed state to about 25%, while the twin-chain system enables the rider to move about 3.2m per rotation of crank despite the bicycle's tiny wheels.
I have seen another bicycle like this with a twin chain system, and I have strong doubts that the actual volume of the bike is reduced so greatly.
The "See Also" links link only to other Sinclair products, not to other folding bicycles in the A-bike's class. While some people might think it natural to link to other (different) products by the same manufacturer, I think it comes across as further advertising for that manufacturer. There is, after all, already a link to both Clive Sinclair and Sinclair Research Ltd. As such, I've deleted these Sinclair-only "See Also" links until someone wants to create a set of links to comparable bicycles regardless of manufacturer. --67.188.0.96 08:49, 31 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Conflict of interest?
Just for the purposes of transparency, I'd like to call on user Binch Shin (talk • contribs) to clarify his business or personal relationship, if any, to the A-bike. The appearance is that his account was registered solely for the purpose of creating and editing this article on the A-bike. This in itself is no sin of course, but it's always a good thing to let people know where information is coming from. --67.188.0.96 08:49, 31 March 2007 (UTC)
