Talk:Willis Stephens

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[edit] Overlong Article

Is it just me, or is there too much space devoted to what is essentially an obscure politician, especially in light of the fact that there are many Assembly members who have no articles, including members who hold prominent leadership positions within that particular legislative body? Ruthfulbarbarity 03:33, 7 September 2006 (UTC)

[edit] re: Overlong Article

Well, IMHO, this is New York, which is less obscure then say the North Dakota state Assembly, but this is Wiki, and we're supposed to be an encyclopedia. I think the article provides well-sourced coverage of this Assemblyman's remarks that his constituents are 'idiots' and his ethical problems, which is probably why he lost the primary by a huge margin. MrPrada911 13:01, 13 September 2006 (UTC)

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Well, I live in New York State and have barely heard of this Assemblyman, let alone the controversy that precipitated his apparent primary defeat.

I agree that it deserves attention, although I don't see why it would merit more than the defeat of Ada Smith, a much more notorious member of the NYS Assembly, in a Democratic primary.

That being said, it's not a huge issue for me.

I do have a problem with the insertion of the word "guff," instead of a much less obscure-and conceivably, accurate-description of this incident. Ruthfulbarbarity 22:15, 24 September 2006 (UTC)

[edit] GA failed

1. Well written? Fail

2. Factually accurate? Pass

3. Broad in coverage? Fail

4. Neutral point of view? O.K.

5. Article stability? Pass

6. Images? Fail (see comments)

Additional comments :

I disgree that such pictures, if they weren't taken by you, are GFDL and as such to remove any doubt should be tagged as copyrighted images until further investigations.
A sentence such as After serving in the Assembly for the past 12 years should be changed for this would not be valid say the next year and since an article should be timeless, it is best to change it.
Same with Stephens himself has served from 1994 to present day., present day should be in an encyclopedia.
Is Mr. Stephens, his wife, Ginny, and their three children reside in Brewster, New York. really useful in the lead section.
I doubt the present is an appropriate tense for articles but it is ok for now.
Political career and background section is not ordered, it is unordered, please make it chronoligical. Stuff about his father/g-father should be moved to another section or be added as a subsection of this one.
Words such as currently, heated, himself, dishonorable, prominent, gracefully, reliably should be avoided, as they convey feelings, redundancy and timestamps.
The purpose of the word trash in Connecticut trash magnate James Galante[6]. is really tough to understand.
Citations should go after punctuation.
Isn't the text of subsection Text of Stephen’s Email copyrighted, I would think yes.
Stephens, who also serves as the legal counsel to the town of Southeast, New York, drew heavy criticism after accepting $9,355 from trash magnate, convicted felon and reputed mob boss James Galante, who was in turn awarded a 1.5 million dollar no-bid garbage contract by the town board on Stephens' recommendation[15]. is a duplication of what is already seen in a previous section.
I think the word memo should be memorandum if I'm not mistaking.
The article is not broad enough.