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[edit] Pete Doherty

What do you think about rating the article A-Level? What is left to be done? -- dreadlady 18:19, 23 October 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

In general a nice article. It is in GA level. I'm not still sure about A-Class. This is my review:

  • Expand the lead. check WP:LEAD.
  • You have the infobox without any pivture. This is not nice. I suggest you use one of the two pictures you have in the article for the infobox. Even the group phot, explaining that the one in the middle is Doherty.
  • "However, while post-production ... involved in other projects (see Yeti and Dirty Pretty Things)". This paragraph is uncitated.
  • I recommend when you quote something no to use italics. If you want to emphasize on a specific quote, have in mind that there is a variety of quoteboxes.
  • I think the "Collaborations" section is short. For sure, it has three stubby paragraphs. Try to make the prose flow a bit better here. With the right expansions of the content and/on mergers of paragraphs you can do that.
  • "left the band on at least one occasion[19] before returning intermittently." I don't see a reason you have the citation in the middle of the sentence and not at the end. Citate in the middle of a sentence, only if it is absolutely necessary.
  • "On New Year's Eve 2005, Doherty held ... leaked onto the internet. 31 March and 1 April 2006 Doherty was performing ... after he failed to turn up in January. For this occasion he produced at the suggestion ... a film with the title "Spew it out your soul". Citations needed.
  • "Most of Doherty's journals are freely available on the internet[1]". Citate the external link properly. After all, you can simply add it in your references.
  • "Albion and Arcadia" is too stubby. I don't see why it should be a seperate sub-section.
  • In "Influences" we read what Doherty himself says about his influences. But what are others (critics, musicians etc.) think about his lyrics?
  • "Awards" is stubby. If you can't expand it transfer the information in another relevant section.
  • You can't have empty sections like "Controversies and Legal Troubles". It does not matter that there is another sister article. Make a concise summary of this article here.
  • "The tabloid press ... Kate Moss". Uncitated paragraph. Personally, I donot also like where this section is placed. I would prefer it somewhere before "Influences", so as to be interconnected with his biography, part of which is this section.
  • Alphabetize categories at the end of the article.--Yannismarou 11:19, 25 October 2006 (UTC)
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