User talk:Wikisjb

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[edit] WP:Cricket

Hello,

If you interested in cricket, why don't you join WP:Cricket. Tintin 15:57, 28 November 2005 (UTC)

[edit] West Horndon

Well, as I said in the edit summary, it is written in the style of stream of consciousness, which is good for literary experiments but doesn't make good reading. Some points

  • It is all one paragraph. Paragraph breaks are good.
  • What there is doesn't appear to be in any particular order. Modern information is mixed with historical information.
  • There is nothing that says what it actually is. Articles should start with something like "X is a town in Y, close to Z, with a population of X."
  • The use of "we find" and suchforth.
  • It is too much like a narrative.

Basically the info there is (mostly) good and relevant - I'd question whether certain things are actually verifiable - but the actual prose needs tearing apart and rewriting in a totally different style. I suggest you look at the articles in the Category:Villages in Buckinghamshire for examples of treatments of villages, those are generally pretty good prose.

I hope you don't think I'm being overly harsh - you did ask ;). Morwen - Talk 20:44, 11 December 2005 (UTC)

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