Talk:Sunkern

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Sunkern (reviewed version) has been listed as a good article under the good-article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can delist it, or ask for a review.

	This article is part of Pokémon Collaborative Project, which aims to improve the encyclopaedic coverage of the Pokémon universe on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, you can edit this article, or visit the project page, where you can join the project, ask for advice, and see what our current focuses are.	Pokémon Portal
???	This article has not yet received a rating on the assessment scale.
PCP To-do: edit  Current focuses - Crawdaunt & Pokémon Cleanup - Vaporeon, Jirachi, etc. Expand - Crystal (Pokémon), Wally (Pokémon), Pokémon Trading Figure Game, etc. Assess and Prioritise articles (Log)

	This article is part of WikiProject Computer and video games, an attempt to build a comprehensive and detailed guide to video games on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, you can edit the article attached to this page, or visit the project page, where you can join the project and/or contribute to the discussion.	CVG Portal
GA	This article has been rated as GA-Class on the assessment scale.
Low	This article is on a subject of low priority within gaming for inclusion in Wikipedia 1.0.
CVG To-do: edit  Gaming Collaboration of the week: X-Men vs. Street Fighter Expand: New CVG Articles, List of Nintendo trademarks, Normality, Pac-Man World 2, Operation Flashpoint: Elite, Call of Juarez, Galactic Civilizations II: Dark Avatar, Ford Street Racing, Betrayal at Krondor CVG Peer Review: Super Transformation, Turok: Dinosaur Hunter, Wikipedia:WikiProject Computer and video games, Yoshi, Black Isle's Torn, Rise of Nations, Kirby (Nintendo), PlayStation 3, Mega Man Zero 4, Luigi Cleanup: Shiny Entertainment, Age of Mythology, Serious Sam II, Mario Kart: Double Dash!!, Ted Price, Betrayal at Krondor, Little Fighter 2 Merge: Current Events (Update needed!) / Deletions / Essential articles / Workshop / Magazines Assess and Prioritise articles (Log)

	This article is part of WikiProject Nintendo, an attempt to build a comprehensive and detailed guide to Nintendo related merchandise and video games on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, you can edit the article attached to this page, or visit the project page, where you can join the project and/or contribute to the discussion.
GA	This article has been rated as GA-Class on the assessment scale.
Low	This article is on a subject of low-importance within Project Nintendo.
Nintendo To-do: edit  Wikify: Cleanup: Team Rocket, Croconaw, Team Rocket (anime), Custom Robo, List of Mario villains, The Legend of Zelda: Twilight Princess Stubs: Baten Kaitos Origins, Forever Blue, see Category:Nintendo stubs Copyedit: Yoshi Expand: Team Rocket, List of Nintendo patents, Dr Mario Requests: Nintendo characters in art

This is the talk page for discussing improvements to the Sunkern article.
Please sign and date your posts using four tildes (~~~~). New discussion topics go at the bottom of the page; click here to start a new topic. New to Wikipedia? Welcome! Frequently asked questions. This is not a forum for general discussion about the article's subject.	Talk page guidelines Be polite Assume good faith No personal attacks Don't bite the newcomers!

Portal:Pokémon Selected Pokémon past entry This article has featured in the Selected Pokémon of the Week! section of the Portal:Pokémon, its entry can now be found here. To suggest a new entry to this section go here.

[edit] GA failed

1. Well written? Fail (Though well referenced) O. K

2. Factually accurate? O.K. (Though well referenced)

3. Broad in coverage? O. K.

4. Neutral point of view? Pass

5. Article stability? Pass

6. Images? Pass

Additional comments :

• Verb tense is not consistent could be improved.

  Examples :

Sunkern are available in Pokémon Gold, Silver and Crystal, both in Route 24, and the National Park. It is also available in Pokémon Emerald, in the Safari Zone,[7] once the player has defeated the Elite Four.

• Needs a throughout copyedit as it now reads like a manual more than an encyclopedic article. (e.g. A Sunkern featured in Episode 189, "Moving Picture", inwhich the group, including Todd, visit a fertile mountain, which has been frozen because of an Articuno, the Pokémon Todd is attempting to photograph. )
• A sentence like Sunkern's statistics are abysmally low, the lowest in the game. is a bit POV with such a word as abysmal.
• The group came across an abandoned Sunkern, and gave it to a visiting old couple in the area. In return for aiding it, the Pokémon evolved with the help of the Sun Stone Ash won at the Bug Catching Contest, allowing the couple to take their picture with a Sunflora, as they did the day they married. doesn't make any sense ... if they gave the Pokémon away how can he use the Sun Stone on the Pokémon.
• An appearance/characteristics section would be a nice addition. Maybe a biology section too.
• There are seventeen different Pokémon types, a special attribute determining strengths and weaknesses of each species, offsetting each other in a complicated series of rock-paper-scissors relationships. is too general to fit on such a specific article. Just a wikilink to a more general-subject article would do the job instead of the sentence.
• The Pokémon anime series and films are a meta-series of adventures separate from the canon that most of the Pokémon video games follow (with the exception of Pokémon Yellow, a game based on the anime storyline). too is too general to be part of such an article.

This article needs a bit of reworking ... if you are interested to have more insight into what you should change, please request more assistance or a deeper review on my talk page. Lincher 18:14, 29 September 2006 (UTC)

I have striked the commented/repaired comments but it still hasn't answer the copyediting I requested which was somewhat the reason I decided not to give it a on hold but rather a failing. If ask someone to help you with this it could be done in a jiffy. I might help too. Good luck. Lincher 19:29, 29 September 2006 (UTC)

Added comments, things to change and giving more insight into my earlier comments. Lincher 19:40, 29 September 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Seeking another review

I did some copyediting to improve some of the run-ons in the article. I'm reviewing the fail Lincher gave. Shin'ou's TTV (Futaba|Masago|Kotobuki) 18:49, 1 October 2006 (UTC)

[edit] GA passed

Even if the wording would need to be copyedited a bit more for some sentences are ambiguous for non-Pokémon related readers, it still is better than the first version sent to GA and is much nicer to read too. Nice work. Lincher 11:38, 3 October 2006 (UTC)