Talk:Southern Pacific 4449

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Southern Pacific 4449 has been listed as a good article under the good-article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can delist it, or ask for a review.

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[edit] GA nomination comments

Before this article can be listed as a good article, I think the following things should be corrected:

• Lead section needs a bit of work - the first sentence is not clear at all to a layman. The last sentence cries out for a source. Overall it should summarise a bit more of the article's content, and should also cater for our international readership by stating which country the locomotive is in.
• POV phrases such as 'They work hard to keep it running' need to be removed
• Section headings should be capitalised like sentences - see WP:MOS. Worldtraveller 12:52, 14 March 2006 (UTC)

Thanks for the comments, I've addressed them as follows:

1. Expanded the lead to include significant bits of the locomotive's history, and to (hopefully) clarify the first sentence; removed the "most photographed" line since it was unreferenced.
2. Performed a copyedit to remove POV comments and clarify a couple points.
3. "Oaks Park" and "American Freedom Train" are proper nouns and should be typed in this manner. I've updated the other section headings.

Slambo (Speak) 20:02, 14 March 2006 (UTC)