Talk:Sociological and cultural aspects of Tourette syndrome

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Wikipedia CD Selection Sociological and cultural aspects of Tourette syndrome is either included in the 2006 Wikipedia CD Selection or is a candidate for inclusion in the next version (the project page is at WPCD Selection). Please maintain high quality standards, and if possible stick to GFDL and GFDL-compatible images.

[edit] GA Review

I have reviewed the 29 October 2006 nomination for Good Article and have the following feedback before I would recommend this for a good article:

  • There are a lot of one- and two-sentence paragraphs in the article. These short paragraphs disrupt the flow of the article and make it jumpy.
  • The very first sentence of the article is confusing. I don't understand what it is trying to say.
  • There is some bits of jargon in the early part of the article that the average reader wouldn't understand. Examples:
    • Tourette syndrome occurs along a spectrum of tic disorders, which includes transient tics and chronic tics.
    • ...relative to their parents, than predicted by the usual model of regression to the mean.
  • What are all the vague references to Laura Schlessinger about? Her picture is in the article and there's one vague sentence about her, but nothing is mentioned about the controversy. Please explain what was said or done.
  • In the legal section, statistics are used without a frame of reference. TS was implicated in 150 cases, 21 of which were criminal. 150 cases out of how many? Is the article saying that 150 cases is a lot, or a little?
  • The introduction, latent advantages section, and legal section are difficult to read. The prose doesn't flow very well, especially part of the latent advantages section that reads like it was cut and pasted out of an academic journal. Too technical, the reader has to do too much deciphering to figure out what is being said. Many of the paragraphs frequently switch from active to passive voice. Try to eliminate the use of passive voice to improve readability.
  • The "legal" section needs a more descriptive title.

I'll keep an eye on the article and put a hold on the nomination to give some time to work out the revisions. Good luck and feel free to ask for clarifications. Neil916 (Talk) 07:23, 18 November 2006 (UTC)

Repeat message (most unfortunate that another author put up four articles for GA at once, all written by me, without inquiring if these articles were ready or if I had time to finish them.) Thanks for the input, Neil916, but there's no need to give it time. As I've explained elsewhere, I did not nominate the article for GA, someone put all the TS daughter articles up for review just as I was traveling and did not have time to finish them, I am the only author, and I don't have time for this polishing/finishing right now. My preference would be to remove them all from GA, and strike all GA templates from the page: I'm not a fan of the entire GA process anyway, and would not have submitted these articles:-) When I have time to polish and finish the article, I will ask for review from the medical project and other copyeditors I know, and not from GA. I'm sorry you had to go to the trouble; thanks again for the input. I will finish these articles when I have time, and then submit them for peer review at the Medicine Project. Sandy (Talk) 14:17, 18 November 2006 (UTC)
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