Talk:Ronn Owens
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A few improvements are suggested below. I'll allow some time for others to weigh in before I make the corresponding edits myself.
1. The paragraph about Owens' show being "the No. 1-rated show on KGO, with over 500,000 regular listeners" needs some dates associated with the claim. That is, while the statement might well be true today, it might not be true tomorrow. (This is a biographical article in an enyclopedia--it shouldn't look so much like a publicity release.)
2. Who, exactly, credits Ronn with introducing the idea of bumper music? (If you look up bumper music in Wikipedia, you will find a stub article that actually credits Rush Limbaugh with the idea.
3. The notion of "Rock Trivia" is not self-explanatory--it needs some description. Also, isn't it true that the "Oldies" format came into being in the 1960's? If so, then the statement that Ronn's creation of "Rock Trivia" predated the "Oldies" format is false.
4. It doesn't need to be said that Ronn is celebrating his thirtieth anniversary at KGO. Not only does such a statement lack the context of any associated dates (see No. 1 above) but we have already seen that Ronn began at KGO in 1975. It's superfluous.
5. The statement that Owens is a "Bay Area icon" seems entirely POV.
6. Similarly POV is the statement that the Marconi award is "prestigious." --Leftymn 07:46, 29 July 2006 (UTC)
Re-worded opening paragraph; deleted unsubstantiated statements about bumper music, Rock Trivia, and Oldies; deleted superfluous "thirtieth anniversary" statement; deleted POV statements about Owens being an icon and the Marconi award being prestigious.
I couldn't figure out how to re-word the statement described in item no. 1 above without eviscerating it, so I left it alone despite its shortcomings.--67.137.33.164 07:16, 6 August 2006 (UTC)