Talk:Model 96 25 mm AT/AA Gun

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This article needs some serious work. I'd like to help out, but I have absolutely no knowlege of these things.

[edit] Attempted copyedit

I have attempted a farily radical copyediting of this article, but I fear that, due to my inibility to comprehend some of the language, some of the intended meaning may have been lost. This may not be a problem, though, since this is a Wiki and will tend toward correction over time anyway. --InformationalAnarchist 8 July 2005 20:12 (UTC)

[edit] Some further issues to address

There are still some really serious issues to address with this page:

• The most glaring and serious problem is that the title uses the convention "25 mm" (i.e., with a space) instead of "25mm" (without). The article title should be changed (or moved to an appropriately named page).
• The article needs some serious Wikification. In fact, I think I will throw that tag up there as well.
• There seems to be a lot of duplicate, irrelevant and extraneous information in the article. Since I am no military expert, I cannot trim it down and clarify it myself.
• Due to the language of the original article, there may be a lot of factual inaccuracies due to misinterpretation. These should be addressed as well.
• The article is still confusing and awkward to read. The cleanup tag is still there for a good reason!

I intend to keep working on what I can. I hope that the copyediting I did has made the article at least a little less intimidating to the community. --InformationalAnarchist 8 July 2005 20:25 (UTC)

It seems that the title problem may not be a problem at all, since most pages about cannon seem to use the number-space-units convention(e.g., "25 mm") rather than the traditional notation (e.g., "25mm"). Maybe we need to do nothing, or maybe we should create a page with the alternate notation that re-directs here? --InformationalAnarchist 8 July 2005 20:34 (UTC)