User talk:Master Thief-117

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[edit] Abdominal Thrusts

Your 1 September edit to the [Abdominal Thrusts] article is entirely in the second person. This is inconsistant with the rest of the article and generally inappropriate for an encyclopedic article. Would you please rework that paragraph to put it in the less personal third person? Pzavon 16:41, 2 September 2006 (UTC)

You said on my User Talk page that your edits to Abdominal Thrusts make it a lot eaier to read when it brings the reader into the writing. That may be true in general, but this is an encyclopedia where a neutral point of view is a major goal. Writing in the second person is not usually appropriate for that and, in my opinion, this is not one of those exceptional times. I've not had time to go back and change it to third person. I would like to see you give it a try, but I will do it if I get the time. Pzavon 17:08, 27 September 2006 (UTC)