Talk:Hawker Tempest/Comments
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Good solid article, near top of B class. Excellent material on the protracted development and good illustrations. Improvements I'd suggest (and I'm not claiming my opinion is anything special), include -
-Rewrite for readability - prose is convoluted in places.
-Consider whether some parts of the text are easy enough for someone completely unfamilar with aircraft of World War II to follow.
-More details of war time service, post war and foreign service, possibly separated from the mark number (perhaps a heading service, then sub division into World War II British and New Zealand service, post War British, Indian and Pakistani).
-Continuing a gripe I made ages ago on the talk page - sorry - the Costerman dubious performance figures and the Rare Bear fan club comments seem unnecessary, and should perhaps be deleted.
-I think India and Pakistan count as major users. On the other hand the Royal Canadian Airforce is noted as a user, which I and at least 3 texts and the Tempest web page (under) seem unaware of. Did the RCAF have Tempests?
-possibly include a profile of survivors? (the already linked, excellent http://www.hawkertempest.se/ has fairly full detials).
However overall a very good page Winstonwolfe 02:44, 8 December 2006 (UTC)