Wikipedia:Featured article review/First Amendment to the United States Constitution

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[edit] First Amendment to the United States Constitution

Messages left at Lord Emsworth, United States, Law, Politics, and U.S. Supreme Court cases. Sandy (Talk) 17:18, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

Ancient, short, unsourced, bad lead, etc. Punctured Bicycle 12:14, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

  • This is far short of FA standards. Let's look at just the writing. At the opening, we're treated to:
    • "Textually, it prohibits the federal legislature from making laws that ..." Textually? The subsequent list is framed as a single sentence, yet each item starts with an upper-case letter.
    • "The First Amendment only explicitly disallows any of the rights from being abridged by laws made by Congress ..." Hard to understand the meaning, and there are redundancies.
    • "Additionally, in the 20th century the Supreme Court has held that ..." Remove the first word. Can it be a little more exact chronologically?

The rest is poorly written too. Tony 13:11, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

I've been watching this article for awhile now, and I have to agree with your assessment. I would add, though, that while the article incorporates summary style for some subsections, the "freedom of speech" subsection is not abbreviated at all, and the "main article" (Freedom of speech in the United States) is pretty bad, thus the entire subsection needs to be moved to the "main article" and summarized in the First Amendment article. However, I tried to get talk page consensus on the issue months ago to no avail. I'm not sure why this one subsection seems to be exempt from the summary style that is used in the rest of the article, but that shouldn't happen in featured articles. · j e r s y k o talk · 14:49, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

  • Comment Needs inline cites. LuciferMorgan 20:36, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
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