Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Personal rapid transit

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  • The style is too choppy (i.e. too many one sentence paragraphs).
  • Only one picture.
  • Some of the quotations, I feel are too long (see the Vuchic quote for example), and could easily be paraphrased. Basically, my issues are style-based - it needs to seem like one voice rather than it's current fragmented feel. The safety and utility part reads, "Most designers... Some systems... Some systems... Most systems". Actually makes it quite hard to read.
  • The article seems incredibly complete and well referenced otherwise. I enjoyed it once I struggled through the prose. Just needs a copyedit and a few more pictures. Peter 16:05, 23 March 2006 (UTC)
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