User talk:Ben MacDui/Sandbox

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[edit] Referencing

Looks like you put a lot of work into this!  :) Overall the formatting's looking pretty good, but I agree that I'm concerned about the quality of the references. In order to make the article "stick", you need to make a case that this subject is genuinely notable to the outside world, meaning to non-Findhorn people. Many of the article's references seem to be to the Findhorn.com website or to publications by Findhorn itself, and those are probably WP:AUTO violations. Can you find any newspaper or magazine articles about the subject? Those would be better, per WP:V and Wikipedia:Reliable sources. --Elonka 16:44, 17 October 2006 (UTC)

Thanks Elonka, you are my “best and only friend”. Ben MacDui 19:00, 18 October 2006 (UTC)

[edit] User:Ben MacDui/Sandbox

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• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
• Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
• This article has no images. Please see if there are any free use images that fall under WP:IUP and WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to Special:Upload; to upload non-fair use images on the Wikimedia Commons, go to commons:special:upload.^[1]
• See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.^[2]
• There may be an applicable infobox for this article. For example, see Template:Infobox Biography, Template:Infobox School, or Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
• Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
• There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
  • it has been
  • it is claimed
  • might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).^[3]
• Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
  • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
• As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
• Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a. ^[4]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 02:04, 28 October 2006 (UTC)

PS the footnotes can be found here: [Wikipedia:Peer review/Automated/October 2006]